Sail Green Shading
Sail Green Shading
SHOCK.HORROR. RIMA this poem!? opinions please!?
Beside its magenta eye of zeal, in its silver boat mercury light. Through this I will reveal turquoise light murmured one night Secret emerald. My skin is milk and the green bottle, the spirals of the vein and the moon shadow. ripple wave I am the Queen, This breath of breeze melting melody. Rest at home rocking, which lies at the core of the water. This carved railing, I gently waking dream eyes the human side. "Look at me, just see how I am? My twisting the tail fins of an opal … My lips are cold blue of a clam, which I inclined fold below this candle. "He knows my lips Sharp salt seas, and became my patient's cheek look. Blink my envy as I am to blame for the curse, to establish my seashell heart ablaze. I can see your eyes is so far … In their eyes I see a young woman. Wow, that is in their arms in the bay of swollen, I hate her! The child of a human tongue. I am 13 so be as hard as you want
You have an impressive vocabulary for someone so young – and their use of rhyme and meter were impressive. The poem seems to be pure fiction, and make people believe almost never is as interesting as the truth. I wish I'd written about something actually saw or a real event that happened to you. You have language skills, if he were writing about something more interesting would probably be well worth reading. I also believe that this is not a very good forum for poetry – but maybe it's another story.
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